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"312, 313, 314," That's how many seconds it has been since I took my life.
"298, 299, 300," That's how many seconds it's been since I droped the blod covered Knife.
"Five whole minutes," That's how long ago my pitiful existence was about.
:Five whole minutes," and now do you think anyone will notice, that's something I highly doubt.
TWO MINUTES LATER
My soul is staring at the lifeless shell drowning in it's own bloody pool.
It let's out a sigh, for there's mothing it could do, nothing for that poor worthless tool.
All around her no one ever cared, and she was to selfish to notice who did.
Instead she had to end it all, but everyone turned away and hid.
Did they realize now that when she was gone, that she held something for them all?
That maybe she was what kept them form their fall?
Or was it an illusion happening over again?
No one cared or noticed, not any that called themselves her close friend.
That's what she felt as the knife hit her with its final blow.
Those last days she felt this, but no one cared to know.
The last minute she cried countless tears,
because she was finally getting what she wanted and she feared.
Two last heart beats and one last breath,
and now she wondered if there was any peace in death?
- by Alibis of the Heart |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 12/01/2008 |
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- Title: Seconds Left
- Artist: Alibis of the Heart
- Description: The inner feelings held back tell the very end.
- Date: 12/01/2008
- Tags: seconds left
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Comments (7 Comments)
- UC Poika - 10/19/2009
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Excellent! I think you bled black ink all over my heart though. I think it wonderful you just say what was going on and not glorifying suicide.
It let's out a sigh, for there's (m) nothing it could do, nothing for that poor worthless tool.
to selfish to notice shoould be too selfish to notice no biggy - Report As Spam
- x0meiko0x - 09/09/2009
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wow this makes mine look crapy
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- Das Matt - 06/03/2009
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This is exactly how I felt back in December, when I attempted suicide... O_O
Brings back some... unpleasant memories...
Extremely well written, though. 5/5 - Report As Spam
- Zuhukanah - 05/16/2009
- very deep. the counting of the numbers helps bring in dramatization and sends hearts beating, which is very good. I'm gonna become ur fan, uhh, can u become mine ? biggrin
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- MelTur - 05/16/2009
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Wow. I love your writing. It's very good. I got your message and checked out your stuff, and I'm glad I did. You are very good. Keep on going.
5/5! - Report As Spam
- Sylvia531 - 05/02/2009
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i luv it!^-^ur good.but it reminds me of this 1 guy in my skool and he killed himself cuz his grandma didnt care about him and she still doesnt care that he's gone now.i didnt know the guy but my friends told me and itz sad.no1 in skool was talkin about it cuz itll bring back very said memories.
nice poem^-^ - Report As Spam
- Kirai Dragon - 04/26/2009
- O.O -ability to talk left-
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