You complete me

• Artist: violet porcelain doll
• Description: Basiclly its about being far away from the one you love and how they complete us.
• Date: 01/22/2009
• Tags: complete

Thinking of you
Longing for your reasuring embrace
Yearning for your gentle loving kisses
Hoping that soon I will see you
And be able to be safe in your arms once again
Because without you I feel so lonely and lost
I don't know which way to go
I don't remember who I am, because you make me whole
You are my other half
Without my other half I'm incomplete
Yin without Yang
Sun without Moon
Clouds without Rain
A heart without a beat
I'm all those things and more without you
And I never want to be away from you for long
I want to always be with you
Forever in your arms
Forever with you snuggled up in a blanket
I hope you'll come running to me soon
Because without you I'm afraid I might die
So please don't delay in coming back to me

Comments

[Idiosyncratic Quirk]

"Come back to me". Surprisingly, I haven't come across many of these on here. ^-^ 3/5. If I had a scale of 1-10, you'd get better but there isn't.

[Kibroth]

A reasonable effort.
This composition longs for more colorful language. Don't hesitate to look up and use words you might not normally use or leave words out that you think are needed.
There's no requirement to make full sentences in poetry!

-K

[LolitaSunshine]

I really like it. i can relate to this poem rather well. Thank you for posting it ^-^