Anger

• Artist: -VSF-Gaara
• Description: i felt emoish so i wrote this. its not complete, i just wanted to see how people liked it so far and ill add on later so add me as a fav if u like this
• Date: 02/28/2009
• Tags: anger

Anger,
Over time
Its become a
Part of me.
With every punch i throw,
Every argument i get into,
And with every insult given or taken,
It grows bigger
And digs deeper.
In the end it will be I
Who wins the fights,
The arguments,
And "insult battles"
After all is one or lost,
What will it feel like?
The anger has been let loose.
Should i give up on life?
There is nothing to feel.
"All is lost, just give it up!"
They all chanted.

Comments

[sk8terpunk718]

well, i liked it. it was very good considering what people try to pass as poetry. if you want to read good stories, go to xX Dark_Imprisonment Xx

[ProfessorKC]

Compare something to an image. John Dunne wrote a great piece on seduction called "the Flea" of all things. When you compare your feelings and actions to images readers can picture in their own way, you add so much mroe weight and power to your words. This just doesn't cut it at all ...

Um ... the Staff of No has spoken!

[Ol Bitey Boots]

Pretty good, but you ask "should I give up on life?" after saying you would win in the end which makes it appear that you're contradicting yourself. After all if you'll win in the end then why give up? Also in my opinion you should change "inult fights" to battles of insult so that you don't use the word fight twice. Other than that though, I liked it. 4/5