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She stepped closer.
They were toe to toe and he could feel her breath, let it tickle his cheek, move his hair.
He reached up and cupped her cheek in the palm of his hand.
“What is this?” she asked.
He moved his other hand so it was gripping her arm.
“I don’t know,” he whispered, moving even closer.
“What are we doing? This is…is…” Her hand came up to rest lightly on his neck.
His hand slid up her arm and into her hair.
It was the softest thing he’d ever felt.
“This is something different,” he said.
Her other hand pushed back gently on his chest.
“I’m scared.” Her eyes shimmered with tears.
“I know,” he whispered. He leaned his forehead into hers.
She looked down. “I don’t know what I’m feeling.”
“Neither do I,” he confessed.
They stepped closer.
“Then what should we do?”
“Whatever we feel like.”
Their noses brushed.
She tipped her face up.
Their lips touched.
For that moment, nothing mattered, the world didn’t exist, time stopped, and it was all okay.
~End
- by AlanivAsthore |
- Fiction
- | Submitted on 07/18/2008 |
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- Title: The Kiss
- Artist: AlanivAsthore
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Description:
A private moment, shared by two people.
I origionally wrote this to go into a longer story(I was practicing writing longer romantic scenes- I used to totally suck at them), but over the course of editing the story, it ended up not really fitting in. I still liked the idea of it, so I just kept it around for whatever. Enjoy. - Date: 07/18/2008
- Tags: romance fluff cute
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Comments (7 Comments)
- raspberrybl0od - 02/08/2011
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Great job!
I usually have the most trouble with romance scenes as well, it's so hard to shift from regular storytelling mode to romantic mode! xD I always seem to spend the most time editing those scene, because I want to make the couple seem believeable. I don't know who these two are, but you really pulled it off here! :3 - Report As Spam
- BlackDream12 - 01/02/2009
- That is so good! I luv your writing!
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- MyfriendsareDohnuts - 07/18/2008
- I agree with the 2nd comment. I think its well described but just something more metaphorical in it would be better I think. Like they flew into dreams of love but you know what now I think that would break part of the poem. LOL IM TEASING YOU!!!! 5 stars.
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- OutOfThinAir - 07/18/2008
- I like it! Its really good!
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- sonnata moonlight - 07/18/2008
- sounds like it could be from a movie, very good
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- cherrygirl223 - 07/18/2008
- ohh i like it s very discreptive
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- Guardian of Peace - 07/18/2008
- Cute
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