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I pulled my hood tighter around my face to block the cold, biting wind. The torn cloths swayed in the breeze. I had walked the cold dark streets of the small city. All I had was the clothes on my back. I had wandered the streets for days. I hadn't felt the warmth of a bed or the comfort of a home in what seemed like forever. All I could do was walk and walk.
Suddenly I noticed a dark figure in the distance. I moved closer with fear but a eagerness to see someone. I moved closer still seeing more detail of the figure. He or she had a hood and a long warm looking cloak.
"Hi." I said in a soft quiet voice. The figure turned to me but I could still not see if it was a male or female.
We stood in silence for a moment then it said," Hello." She said in a high pitched but sweet, quiet voice, in response. She turned away from me looking in the same direction as before.
"What are you looking at?" I said again looking in the same direction. I waited but the woman never responded. I looked harder in hopes of looking at what she was looking at. Then in the far distance I saw a single light of a candle. It was coming closer with each second.
"What is that?" I asked again quietly. Then in that instant I turned to look at her but she was gone. Nowhere in sight. I turned to look at the light but it was also gone.
Was the whole thing an illusion? A figment of my imagination? Finding no answer I continued on my endless journey to walk forever in the darkness of night.
- by notAgoodSIGN |
- Fiction
- | Submitted on 11/05/2008 |
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- Title: The darkness of night
- Artist: notAgoodSIGN
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Description:
a short story i wrote because i was bored
please comment and tell me how i can get better at writting. It will make me very happy so please do - Date: 11/05/2008
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Comments (4 Comments)
- Gypsy_Azura - 11/15/2008
- I disagree with the guy who said this needed a storyline. It's fine this way. Very good writing. Just a couple grammar errors it should be "All I had were the clothes on my back." you should also take out the "Than it said" it flows better if you say "We stood in silence for a moment "Hello" she..." Great writing keep it up.
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- Paien - 11/05/2008
- It had good descriptions, something i need to imporve on but needs more plot and stronger characters.
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- ladyluck2326 - 11/05/2008
- really nice detail, it flows quite well.
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- Jetmichael777 - 11/05/2008
- Hey, that was pretty good, but I think you should have a better story line,like an actual story would.
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