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"daddy what are you going to get me for my 15th birthday" the little girl asked her father "jasmine your 12 you have 3 years until then" her father said in a warm tone "well time passes very fast"jasmine replys 3 years pass and jasmine asked her father "daddy what are you giveing me for my quinceanera?" her father smiles and thinks for a while he takes a deep breath "something that will last you forever" jasmine's eyes get big like a little kid's would when they see candy. AT the ceremony she tells her mother she fill a bit faint but her mother said shes only a bit nerves. she walks up the isle she can hear her guests wispering how beatiful she looked in her dress. the atmostphere is happy and then turns into shock. jasmine had colapsed on the floor. they ambulance rushed her to the hospital. the family waited in for the doctor to come out saying she was going to be fine, but it was the opisite the doctor said her heart had stoped beating, she was stable, but she needed a heart transplant, or she would stay in a comma. her father stayed with her till night.in the morning jasmine's mother got a call for her husband saying jasmine was going to wake up from her comma. when jasmine's mother got to the hospital she asked the nurse where her daughter was the nurse said she was in surgery. the first thing she thought was they found a downer and she was right but the downer was her husband.jasmine's father died.... at the funeral jasmine remebered the last words her father told her.
the tombe stone read
Aron gultillo 1963-2000
A careing and loved father and husband
- by Sow It Up K i d |
- Fiction
- | Submitted on 03/15/2009 |
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- Title: thank you daddy
- Artist: Sow It Up K i d
- Description: ....well i wrote this some weeks back and i want to know what others think of it
- Date: 03/15/2009
- Tags: daddy
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Comments (3 Comments)
- Sow It Up K i d - 04/09/2009
- yeah im not so good at writing but i always accept criticism ^^
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- enmortem - 03/22/2009
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Aw that was a good story!
It could use a little more substance and perhaps some grammer, punctuation, capitalization, and spelling but other than that it was awesome ^^ - Report As Spam
- Lackilester - 03/15/2009
- the ending is sad... sad
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