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Alice walked through a narrow and well paved street of shockville. She kept walking with her head down, the wind blew swiftly through her hair. She was a very shy girl who was barely noticed by both the inside and outside world. People around her ignored her presence as if she was a walking accident. While she was walking she felt the presence of someone walking next to her, the wind nibbled on her skin while she turned her head. She noticed not a soul was on sight, but only observed therestless, and chirping birds building nests for their offsprings. She sighed and kept walking toward her house where even their she was an unnoticed worm that squrimed around without a purpose. She actually felt someone actually whispered in her ear a melody, it song "You are not trash but yet a beauty of a god.... you are wonderful." Her eyes lit up and said in a low voice, "That voice was right i am not trash but a human that makes mistakes." She nodded and kept walking with not a frown but yet a smile that shone brightly in the sun.
- by NinAnarri_101 |
- Fiction
- | Submitted on 06/17/2009 |
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- Title: I am....
- Artist: NinAnarri_101
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I hope who ever reads it actually likes it because i am still 13 and i want to be a famous writer in the future belive it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Please like it... - Date: 06/17/2009
- Tags: thisisagoodshow
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Comments (4 Comments)
- candy-pop1999 - 07/14/2009
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you have great details and senses>.<
i say 5/5!
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you've got a lot of talent.
good part is, you know how to use it!
if you plan on writing any more sxtories, i give you a thumbs up for making a good choice and GOOD LUCK!!!!!!!!!!!>.< - Report As Spam
- blaze dragonite - 06/19/2009
- for example go check out my story you might get what i mean. ok
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- blaze dragonite - 06/19/2009
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nice i like it. just try to get a little deeper into the story it helps when the reader can know exactly what the character feels by feeling just the same
still i say 5/5 - Report As Spam
- rosie1995 - 06/18/2009
- Nice ambitions, I'm 14 with the same goal, I think if you make this a full length book it will be really good!
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