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When I woke up, I didn’t want to answer the door. I just lied in my bed, trying to go back to sleep. I never knew that answering the door would make such a big difference in my life. I finally got up, put my robe on, and walked to the door. “Who is it?” I asked, almost falling asleep again. “You received an invitation to the academy.” The man answered. He looked like he was sixteen. “What academy? I didn’t sign up for anything.” I replied, very suspicious. “It’s a martial-arts academy. No one signs up. Our master chooses people.” He said. “So your master, who is probably one-hundred years old, is selling door-to-door invitations? No thanks buddy, I don’t want any invitation. I’m broke.” I said. “You don’t get it! When you feel tough enough, you can come. Besides, why would we want a girl slaying monsters?” He was starting to get on my nerves. First, he walks up to my door, and tries to sell me something. Then, he calls me a wimp. And that’s where I draw the line. “Look mister! I am tough enough for your academy! You might as well give me a black belt!” I said, as harshly as I could. “Yes! I am the smartest in my class! You just got tricked!” he said, insulting me. That was when I got p*ssed off. I flung my foot in the air, aiming for his weak spot. Amazingly, he blocked it with his hand, grabbed my leg, and threw me onto my own porch. My arm was bleeding, so I got a bandage out of my pocket, and put it on my wound. He offered to help me up and said, "My name's Koro. Do you want to join our academy?" He said it as if he had never knocked me flat on the ground. "Okay, Koro, give me all you got." I said, picking myself up. "I'm glad you agree with us, Tessa." Koro said. I stared at him, shocked. "How do you know my name?" I asked him. Koro didn't answer. He just walked away, and said, "Come on!" I followed him until I couldn't walk anymore. When I felt like passing out, he said, "We're here!" I looked at and old, chinese building. I walked up the steps, and went in.
To be continued...
- Title: A Fighter's Dream Part 1
- Artist: sakura261
- Description: I had always been a good fighter, but not like this before. By the way, this is my first submission.
- Date: 04/06/2011
- Tags: fighting ninjas academy
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Comments (2 Comments)
- Overworkedandunderpaid - 06/07/2011
- Oh yeah, also, your plot is painfully obvious and, to be honest, BORING. Try again. Or rather, don't.
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- Overworkedandunderpaid - 06/07/2011
- I don't even know where to begin. Except, maybe, that it was complete and utter trash. For one thing, you're paragraphing skills are sorely lacking. Every time a new person speaks, it's a new paragraph (only one space. Double space implies a change of setting). Also, your grammar is appalling, you're plot lack imagination, the pace is much too fast (no set up. I don't give a crap about these characters), and never end a story with 'To Be Continued'. That should be reserved for trashy sitcoms.
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