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Our eyes meet across the hall,
We know know our eyes and selves are here,
But yet we should be in in a different universe...
Alone...
But yet we shall be so far apart
and all I want is to be alone...
With you...
And I do hope you feel the same-
But, again, I know you do
Just in your own way...
For us alone...
- by iiSarajean |
- Non Fiction
- | Submitted on 10/10/2008 |
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- Title: To the You I knew...
- Artist: iiSarajean
- Description: I was in American History when I wrote this I think it's kinda weird... plz don't leave any super harsh comments!
- Date: 10/10/2008
- Tags: knew
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Comments (7 Comments)
- retty383832 - 03/19/2009
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I think it has a lot of potential, I don't know how I feel about the ellipses, for example your last two lines could read
Just in your own way...
... For us alone.
Other than that I feel like it has really strong imagery. Kudos! - Report As Spam
- pain_akatsuki_leader_4553 - 10/13/2008
- your a really good poet......is this your first one?
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- gothgirl483 - 10/13/2008
- LOVES! I DON'T THINK IT'S WEIRD
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- Robotic Dream Weaver - 10/10/2008
- I love this! ^__^ Good job! So cute <3
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- Xx_Senior_Hitsugaya_Xx - 10/10/2008
- some 1 wants 2 get busy XDDD nah anyways its great i luv how u wrote at the start our eyes meet across the whole. very creative luv it
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- LiL CLAWS AWR OUT - 10/10/2008
- it's romantic but not too good but nice.
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