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A genius, your creator
She has managed to create perfection
In you.
Volumptuous, curvatious
Beautiful,
Decorated with sparkles and colours
And carved with deep lines of
Wisdom, focus, and strength of heart.
So perfect you seem outside
As flawed as you indeed may be
In ways which I cannot see;
Proud lip
Long thin neck
Confident, full, decorated body
And the sweetest foot
Slender, careful, in small pointed heels
Like a little princess
Yet heavy and strong
And you can tell
But only when you explore by touch.
It's then that you feel the
Bumps
And textures
That give life to you.
It's when you explore by hand that you are
Uncontrollably drawn inside
In your heart
In your belly
Where the light doesn't easily reach
Where the real character hides.
Spirals, waves
Marks where careful fingers turned you from
A part of the foundation of life,
The earth,
Into a means for inspiration
So we can live with that little electricity,
That little fire,
That keeps everything spinning.
- Title: Ode to a Vase
- Artist: Kiwi_Kyra
- Description: The vase which I'm talking about was made by a great potter and idol of mine. If you can't also tell, I also draw inspiration from Pablo Neruda.
- Date: 07/17/2008
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Comments (3 Comments)
- fizznomore - 07/17/2008
- Good effort - it shows lots of potential. Punctuation errors & inconsistencies detract from the overall piece. Nice ending.
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- Marael - 07/17/2008
- That is a very beautiful poem. I agree completely with Kyran_2004...great imagery! Good job!!
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- Kyran_2004 - 07/17/2008
- I like how this poem can be read as a love poem as well. I mean, each line could have just as easily been talking about a woman whom you adore wholeheartedly. It moves me quite deeply, actually.
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