I Bleed

• Artist: Taijia_Sango
• Description: [comment please!!!]A description of what one may feel when going through the final stage of life; death
• Date: 10/23/2008
• Tags: bleed death dying suicide murder

As Darkness decends
I fell the chill,
The clammy cold,
And the sticky dew.
Stifled mewlings
Ebb and Fade.
I no longer hear,
I am no longer afraid.

My Sight is fading
Edging from gray to black.
My chest is still,
Muscles going slack.
No longer I struggle,
cry, or plead;
I simply lay there,
And I bleed.

Comments

[justcallmejack]

wow...and i thouth ur other one was good...
its so good!!!!!!!!
luv it!!=D

[justcallmejack]

wow and i thouth ur other one (death is not emo)
was good.
but now i see this....
5/5!!!!=D

[rose-eagels13]

i love is one

[Taijia_Sango]

Wow. So you need me to spell it out for you? Okay
Poem is simple...why? Reflects the simplicity of death -- death is easy, life is difficult, hence why he/she SIMPLY lays there and bleeds. To stay a life, the fight, is too difficult.
THERE spelled out for you so you, Formosus Aestas, do not have to think on your own. I know it can be hard for people like you who try to act like he/she knows what he/she is talking about.

[Formosus Aestas]

Heh. My comment was deleted. I got no PM, so I'll give you the benefit of the doubt. This time.

It's another descriptive poem. I don't hate these, per say, they're easy to read, but there's no point to them. Like there's no point to this, no meaning you're trying to convey- just describing. This could be forgiven if only it was described well but no, it really isn't, just the same old tired phrases and the same old topic. Hate to say it, hun, but YEAH, it's pretty emo.

[Formosus Aestas]

So? Is that it? Another descriptive poem? *sigh* Sadly enough, there's nothing original about it- there's only the simplistic description (not even told in a new way, an exciting way) and no conclusion, no underlying meaning, no point.

You did request comments.

[SilvertongueSagittarius]

E- to the M- to the O my god gurl u so emo

yes, it's an insult to the beat of fergaliscious