Tsuki no Hikaru

• Artist: Camui382
• Description: I can never understand how and why I write these the way I do...sometimes I wonder if it's from an experience in my past lives or something else, but this is what it feels like to me since I've been lonely for just about my entire existence...I wonder sometimes if it's simply too much to ask to find someone that I can love. Though poems and songs these days are mostly like this, to me it's fine since it expresses what I feel on a personal level like it would anyone else.
• Date: 10/28/2008
• Tags: tsuki hikaru

I gaze upon you from a distance
As you stand in the middle of the lake
That lay in front of me
The moonlight shines down upon you
Gently caressing your body
As your wet skin glistens
All I can do is look at you in awe
I wonder if my hands will ever be pure
Enough to touch your translucent figure
I gaze into your eyes from where I am
Your figure ever so beautiful under this
Purifying light within this endless darkness
Will my voice ever reach you
As you cry out into the darkness for me
Will I ever be able to reach you
Under this illusionary light that binds me
Within our solitary prisons
All I can do is cry out your name
All I can see is your pale wet skin
Your trembling lips cry out for me
As I reach my hand out to you
Within this illusionary world
Let the waves come at me
While I continue forward to you
I don’t want you to fade away
As I struggle through the torrent
All I can see is you within this moment
Frozen in time under this moonlit night
Is your pale figure as my eyes begin to blur
As I awaken from my struggle
I am beside your gentle presence
All we can do is hold each other as we look
Into one another’s eyes under this enchanting
Night with the light from the moon showering us
I can feel you now as you lay against me
Your body is warm as I look at your face
The light from the moon glistens on your wet skin
Before you start to fade away
Leaving me once more
Under this pure light
Within this pale moonlit night
With the last phrase you uttered to me
I’ll be waiting for you
Now and forever

Comments

[Raikou_sonzai]

Not being rude, but the title is spelled, "Suki", and if you're trying to say "I love you", it's "Aishteru". Very Good Poetry though, not like the other crap around here. You've got a lot of potential, real emotion and you know how to show it. I also like the fact that you didn't try capitolizing words and using text talk all over the place. 5/5
(and for your descripption, just stop looking for love, let it find you.)

[Tqueela]

A ♥ i

[Toufuku]

So basicly the title means "curse of light"
nice

[Janeway_STVoyager]

It's very deep. But I must say that you're able to express your feelings enchantingly. The message of this could be said in many ways. It would just on the readers perception.