The Thought

• Artist: applesauce262
• Description: yes its about her
• Date: 11/30/2008
• Tags: thought alone zero love lost

the thought of doing it strays away
when i know i get to see you another day

and though your not mine
this is not out of line

because you know my feelings
their all very clear
I've told you more than once
that i love you my dear

and if we weren't meant to be
though it seems to me
that we are so perfect for each other
there could be no other

and if you stay with him
i will not fight away these feelings
of lust and sin
that i would do anything for you

i will wait and i will gaze
at all your beauty throughout my days

and when he finally breaks you in two
i will be there to help you renew

and after all the drama and bliss
i will still long for your dry,cracked lip kiss

and after the beginning and before the end
and you want to mend
your bridge of pride to her

i will have one thing to say to you
that you already knew

She was yours,

Now she's mine,

You've burnt the bridge,

Thats your problem,

Not mine.

Comments

[Miss Granola Suicide]

A few gramatical errors...but otherwise good!

[ree-ree_bear]

you should really show her these poems kelley i will help a lot im sure of it(:
keep it up #1 fan,
Kyree(:

[applesauce262]

to see any of my other poems tag "zero" or search my name (zerorocker262) plz comment and vote!!!

[nighthammer17]

Also, in stanza seven, i think the line would read better as "I will be there to help you renew", without the first you

[nighthammer17]

Very good imagery... I love the detail about the "cracked lip kiss".

I would suggest a more standard stanza length, to help establish and reinforce the thoughts you are trying to express. By linking the first and second, seventh and eighth stanzas, you drive the fact that you are the outsider in the relationship looking in; and that your devotion will never end, respectively.