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Do you really love me?
I ask this question because I can't see,
If you do love me or your just playing,
For my heart is not a toy, so quit procrastinating!
Do I really feel your love?
I don't know.
when you give me a hug,
I feel cold like a bug under my rug.
When you give me a kiss,
It's like a curse on my lips:
Bitter and tasteless.
So I say that it's over, we move on.
To see other people who we could really love.
My next love will make my heart stop and skip a beat,
And make me not wonder if she really does love me.
I move without rest in my seat,
Whenever she is near or when we meet,
Her kisses would be so sweet.
I can't wait just to sweep her off her feet!
I will stand by her side and take my shield in my hand.
For when ever she is in trouble I am not afraid of a fight, I'll take a last stand.
I am a knight and I am loyal to my love.
Never again will I say;
Do you really love me?
- by lonewolf_of_the_woods |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 12/07/2008 |
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- Title: Do you really love me?
- Artist: lonewolf_of_the_woods
- Description: I wrote this just to see if my gf really did loved me, turns out I made her cry because the poem made her think about what she was doing to me. She was playing around with me, and now she is sorry for it. Now that I've moved on, this poem could be useful to someone else, enjoy!
- Date: 12/07/2008
- Tags: really love
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Comments (7 Comments)
- cute_08winx - 12/26/2008
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You should be the ACTION not the WORD itself.put that to your next entry. and some REALISM.scan the next part of the stanza.the part that goes like this:So I say that it's over, we move on.
To see other people who we could really love.
My next love will make my heart stop and skip a beat,
And make me not wonder if she really does love me."
And so on and so forth, Hey, you might had gone offended at me but it's just my own perspectives, it's in you if you LIVE IT or YOU LOVE IT
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- cute_08winx - 12/26/2008
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I DON'T KNOW WHAT TO SAY... some how from my own perspectives... it's good especially when you came to the part when you said; Do I really feel your love?
I don't know.
when you give me a hug,
I feel cold like a bug under my rug.
When you give me a kiss,
It's like a curse on my lips:
Bitter and tasteless.
It was all good when suddenly you came up with the last part....it ruined the poem... you wanna know why? Cause sometimes, even if he or she was made for you.. it doesn't mean that she will be - Report As Spam
- Fancy dani323 - 12/11/2008
- like cuddly i feel the same way
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- xXCuddlie_Yet_ViciousXx - 12/09/2008
- i felt the same way. it seemed as if my ex had just been toying with my heart. i really like this poem!!
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- X-ISex S N O O P Y-X-DGB- - 12/07/2008
- vary good 5/5
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- elorsagu - 12/07/2008
- very nice
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