Don't

• Artist: turning it upside-down
• Description: A poem from the point of view of two characters from stories I've written...(Ella and Ashlyn--same as in my other poem, "Shh...Hush...") Enjoy! And plz comment?
• Date: 12/10/2008
• Tags: dont

Stare straight ahead.
Don't smile. Don't frown.
Don't laugh. Don't cry.
Keep your thoughts hidden.
Keep your mind yours.
Don't let them know.
Even when it hurts.
Don't show your weakness.
It'll only make it worse.
Don't tell anyone.
You'll surely be punished.
Don't make them mad.
They'll make you sorry.
Don't fight back.
They'll beat you to a pulp.
Don't show that it hurts.
They thrive on our pain.
Just submit, get down low,
Brace yourself and
Take the blow.

Comments

[Xx_Making-Time_xX]

i like it, though i had 2 read it a few times to understand. 6/5

[conceptually_concrete]

I gave it a 5/5, which is odd for me considering I criticize structure and grammar very much, and the structure in this poem isn't grand. However, the viewpoint and story behind it make up for the lack of set form. Excellent work.

[the_ashen_child]

i like it^^

[CapnBuBu]

Luv it! 5/5