The Scar

• Artist: Fake Silence
• Description: This is the first time I ever wrote something this EMO.
  And, i personally think it's quite okay for a first time...
  Tell me what you think of it and, how to improve.
  I know it's short.
• Date: 01/08/2009
• Tags: scar

A broken plate is quite useless.
My broken heart took quite a long time to recover.

And, now,
Even though it's almost healed,
I know it'll forever leave a scar...

A scar,
Just like the one I have on my left wrist,
The one I carved,
The day you walked away.

Comments

[Music For Hamsters]

wow...that was amazing it was like so there no hiding what you cant hide

[Failure and Disfunction]

Good, and I agree with xTahirux.

[Tahi the Treacherous]

A very deep poem, and something I'm sure was difficult to express.

It was simple. If I were to offer any advice, it would be to make it more complex to better portray its emotional depth, (for example, the use of more thought-provoking phrases, or words that more fully get across the feelings you are trying to share). However, I feel it's simplicity may be a more straight-forward and direct way of expression, and the one you were going for.

Nice. smile

[yinyangtwinsxss]

Rather interesting it was..

I liked it, five stars.

[Hungary HomoBoy Hedervary]

Interesting. I like the feelings put into it, especially the last line. Nice job.

[marleyann]

This is a good one. (:

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i like it