As Life goes by....

• Artist: Chrissy_5909
• Description: Hi Um plz read this,
  The gud thing about this is its short lols.
  Just Comment and rate.
  U can Comment on wat I have to work on cuz im not really a Poetry person lols.
  
  KUdos!!
• Date: 01/20/2009
• Tags: life goes past

My feet are in the Sand,
The wind whistleling through my hair

I look at the Sky,
And I see different People Appear

The Tides Come in,
In every sort of level

'Oh dear god'!,
I see a devil

Ever HeartBeat is time,
And all these years you've wasted lots of dimes

As I watch life go past,
I learnt at last,

That Every heartBeat does worth a dime.

xoxo

Comments

[xxVampyre21xx]

icon_smile.gif it's good except for the last part where does might sound better as is "every heartbeat is worth the dime" or you could also say worth much more than a dime though that wouldn't go w/ the poem now would it lol srry off topic, mayb just "That Every heartBeat IS worth THAT dime (or THOSE dimeS)." would make it perfect. ... at least, that's just my opinion. Overall though it's a great poem.

[music_rules14]

This is a really good poem