The Pail and the Sponge

• Artist: Fake Silence
• Description: These are a few random lines, written for two of my friends, when they were going through a hard time in their friendship, and wouldn't talk for almost one month. I didn't know what to do, and could only hope and hope and pray and pray that things will get solved eventually. They haven't sorted it out yet, and watching them staying not talking hurts.
• Date: 04/03/2009
• Tags: pail sponge friends

I'm lost in my world.
The very same one I created, and hated.

That moment,
A dangerous thought crossed my mind.

I thought of going back to time,
To the very beginning,
When things were just perfect,
When the water didn't overflow and soak the sponge beside the pail.

I would swear to you that the thought didn't stay in my head
For more than a fraction of a second.

But, the side effects went on long after that.

Now, every minute my eyes were closed,
I see nothing but you, and her, and us.

The damn pail doesn't know what he is doing to the sponge.
And the sponge was stupid enough to not run.

I'm useless enough to sit back and watch the pail and the sponge,
Both being drowned by the water.

Promises are lies.
Forevers don't last.

Comments

[MeganLoveHim]

i loved it. smile )

[Agrikar the Hidden]

It's freelance. A lot of freelance sounds that way; in a conversational manner. I think it's perfectly fine.

[Tahi the Treacherous]

The imagry was great. It's a comparison that can be easily visualized.

Now, this hardly makes sense to me, but this does not feel like a poem to me. It feels like someone would say to another. There is not rhythm or tempo here. This may be intentional, but I wouldn't know.

[yinyangtwinsxss]

umm..I'm sorry I didn't really like it at all. )=

2/5

[P00R L3N0]

nice imagery. another brilliant piece from you

[Dragons Willow]

.....wow.....that's the best thing i've read in a long while! the imagery, the emotion, it's simply amazing! i hope this wasn't a one time, flash in the pan, kinda project. i hope your friends realize soon that painful waters are easily dried by the warmth of the sun! rock on sunshine!!! ^0^v

[Swiped v-card]

5'd :3