Are you Okay?

• Artist: dutchbrosdude
• Description: I made this poem in school, I was really bored. lol
• Date: 04/16/2009
• Tags: okay help quiet silence poem

Are you Okay?
The impossible question.
"Just Tired"
As I smile and nod.
Like a drone of my own self conscience.

I NEED HELP!
COME HELP ME!
These words repeat in my head
On the tip of my tongue
cutting like razor blades
Trying to escape.

A cool breeze rapes my cracked lips
Never a word spoken of my true Self.

Always "Tired"
Never truthful
Honesty locked up inside.

I sit alone in silence,
The eye gouging darkness surrounds me.
As i ask myself
Will i be silent forever?.....

Comments

[Musical Colours]

I like it but yeah u do need 2 get more of attention in my noggin... lol

[domeXD]

yea it could be more "reader friendly"... but poetry isnt always about the reader, its about writing the words of your true Self... personally i feel exactly what poem portrays... i guess you either "get" this kinda stuff or u dont... anyways, well done!
peace, love, and light to you! smile

[iRawrasaur]

Very deep, very dark. I like it, but you should try to pull the reader in a bit more; make them feel the way the character in the poem does. 4/5. :]

[Dark_by_Heart]

WOW....awesome...i love poems....your a great poet.... smile ....