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The wind coming and going softly and quietly through the trees,
while the animals and the beasts stalk through the leaves,
everyone and noone can tell the angry,loud,screeches of the jungle from the quiet soothing sounds of the forest,
in the jungle you can ignore it,in the forest...you dont have to
- Title: the forest
- Artist: man4139
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Description:
The wind coming anf going softly and quietly through the trees,
while the animals and the beasts stalk and walk quieltly through the leaves,
everyone and noone can tell the angry,loud screeches of the jungle from the quiet soothing sounds of the forest,
in the jungle you can ignore it,in the forest...you dont have too - Date: 05/26/2009
- Tags: forest
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Comments (3 Comments)
- iAngelicGuardian - 05/27/2009
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friend to friend advice?
3rd line is too long dude.
But the idea is good. - Report As Spam
- man4139 - 05/26/2009
- not my best writing it lacks a lot
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- zarEen-13 - 05/26/2009
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i kinda get the idea..
i'm not good at poetry myseLf but.. i think you need a LittLe rhythm in it to make it sound better.. ^^
i'ts gOod..
hope you'LL do better on your every work.. :3 - Report As Spam