Friends

• Artist: Moonlight Oracle
• Description: Happened to me this year...
• Date: 06/25/2009
• Tags: newfriends

You may think friends will last forever,
Some friendships won't make it.
Forever is a long time,
I don't think that it can take it.
The fights,
Drama,
Horrible moments,
In a young teenagers life,
Really makes you wonder,
Is it worth it?
There is a way to get rid of these horrible things.
New Friends =]
Now let's try that again
Let's think about the good times,
That we can have now.
Like when you helped me with my first crush,
Or when you gave me confidence to stand back up,
Even when I was worried I would fall right down.
You are my new best friend,
You never make me frown.

Comments

[Stella Luna LaStarr]

there were some mistakes like with the commas and periods but over all this was a cute verse.
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[Taste of a Raindrop]

In your first line, change the comma after "forever" to a period. This is a problem that seems to keep occuring in your poem. Here's what you should do. Write it out as a normal piece instead of poetry. Put the proper punctuation marks and apply the proper grammar rules to all the lines and then copy it back in poetry form. Then it will be fixed. ^_^

[Moonlight Oracle]

I don't know about this one either....