Are Your My Forever...?

• Artist: ChocoPiccoxxChrissii_
• Description: <3 I made this poem over the summer break
  - tell me if you like it but if you dont you may say anyharsh thing you wanna say....
• Date: 09/09/2009
• Tags: your forever

It's been only two days,
But its seems that we've been together forever,
Its like a dearm no other girl has gone thru,
But when Im gone will you still love me...?
Or is it just the riches that you love....?

Later on when you told me I don't love you anymore,
My heart just tore apart.....
Just leaving me to my dead sorrow....
Everytime I watch you walk down the hall,
Its like a knife stabbing my back until I died,
You with that girl makes me suffer.....

A few days later you tell me you love me....
But now I know I would never wanna be with you again,
You've stabbed me once but you can't stab me twice....
My words are DON'T BOTHER ASKING AGAIN GOOD-BYE...

Those words where harsh but I had to say what I had to say,
If I went down that road again I may have never come back again....

When I find my forever I know he would be better than you,
If he was a werewolf , or a vampier.....it wouldn't matter,
All I care about is your love for me and my love for you.....

" I Love U "









- thx to my artistict luv for art I wouldn't have writtin this peice of art it just made me feel better about me.... heart

Comments

[x_Kaleido Ruby_x]

I think it's good, but a bit too blunt. You have to have a story hidden behind mystifying words. But, it really gets your feelings across and makes for a better story more so than a poem. Either way, I like ti and you should keep practicing! try to get a better rhym scheme going on like abc abab etc GOOD LUCK