Tears for head

• Artist: hmong goddess
• Description:
• Date: 09/18/2009
• Tags: tears love hate

the tears i bleed,
was for you,
why?
becuse you,
you!
made me bleed
you cheated on me....
but the loss of blood was okay
i just have to say
i chop off her head





comment by me: LOL she got pwn 4laugh

Comments

[doodie_dinosaur]

Your tenses are not corresponding. Lots of grammatical errors. Other than that, its a decent idea. 2/5

[Spiderweber]

T.T so beautiful...O.o Lol jk nice poem though.