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You sound
like an old man with children
like a scolding crow
like
train-tracks.
Your works are harsh, bitter
sharp and short
as a switchblade between my ribs.
A more suitable heart.
You sound
like the moment before a car wreck
when I shut my eyes
and pray I'll open them in a moment
that I will walk away
from this crumpled rose of metal.
You sound
like a hyena
shrill and fearless
cackling in morning, noon and night.
Irreverent.
You sound like
silver tastes, bitter and cold
against my tongue, and merciless
as mercury
poison sliding down my throat.
- by Rynn Calais |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 12/23/2009 |
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- Title: You Sound
- Artist: Rynn Calais
- Description: Comment and critique are appreciated.
- Date: 12/23/2009
- Tags: sound
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Comments (4 Comments)
- nbetweener - 02/23/2010
- Interesting. Some really good descriptions. Should 'works' in the second stanza been 'words'? Seems like it'd make more sense that way.
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- animaldreamer121 - 01/04/2010
- i kinda like it 3/5
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- Brooklay - 12/24/2009
- Incredible. 'Nuff said.
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- XxBLOOD_JAYxX - 12/23/2009
- That's really fantastic!
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