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As I drifted into a now lifeless slumber
The rain clouds gazed down at me
A wall, a curtain blocked my view
Incapacitated I could not see
I swept it aside but hated the sight
The reflection, a sight familiar
I had lost all hope for just a moment
The sand inside my pillar
Envy for anyone, everyone
Trying so hard to be free
Unencumbered of burden, the weight of it all
But on the other hand, that's just not me
I fight for the things that are so true
Repulsed by never ending deception
A glimpse of light within the darkness
Finally, we've found reception
Hello?! Are you there?!
Are you the light? The light that never goes out?!
I assuredly hope you are my beacon
Let us turn this ship about!
But be warned when headed towards that goal
For there are troubles along the way
But take the path you've already chosen
Take precaution as not to stray
Stay close to the marks that guide us there
But how can you tell? You ask
The things that matter the most to us
Need not wear a mask
There is a faint light within most of us
And it's hard to ignore the call
Let us journey forth for a better tomorrow
Echoing forever "So say we all"
And so this journey will come to an end
Even if it's not tomorrow
A fight that engulfs both black and white
Let us hope to end happily, no sorrow
As I looked into the reflection once more
Hope flooded in, astoundingly familiar
I had changed my mind, no more sand for me
Re-invented now was my pillar
And as I drifted into a now peaceful slumber
The sun beamed down at me
A wall, with a window enabled my view
Once again my world felt free
There is a faint light within most of us
And it's hard to ignore the call
Let us journey forth for a better tomorrow
Echoing forever "So say we all"
- by Transcend_Unity |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 07/21/2010 |
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- Title: So Say We All
- Artist: Transcend_Unity
- Description: The poem is about the fight we all have within ourselves, or with others about choosing our own paths, doing what's right, and knowing that no matter how many times we get knocked down or lose hope, there's a light that never goes out. Take heart to the words, but more importantly, take heart the meaning. Please please PLEASE, Comment! I love to hear what you guys think!!!
- Date: 07/21/2010
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Comments (3 Comments)
- ClockworkQuill - 12/19/2010
- The imagery is is great, but it's almost a little too long. Also spacing between stanzas is really needed and would make it much easier reading.
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- Mario the Davidic Hero - 07/28/2010
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wow.... that's all i can say.... wow....
u should practice spacing in between a minimum of four lines or more if u wish, but other than that.... great job! 5/5 - Report As Spam
- Destroyed-Kitten - 07/24/2010
- i really liked it
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