Dream or Nightmare?

• Artist: Mage_In_Training
• Description: The original title is Terrible Dream or Beautiful Nightmare, but they wouldn't let me put it in the title, so here you go. This is a poem written by me, and I would like your word on it. ^-^
• Date: 01/03/2011
• Tags: dream nightmare

The dead of winter
A starless night
All within my lonesome sight
Climb into bed and fall asleep
I pray my sanity to keep.

A dream starts to form
Mocking me.

The house is alight with lights
The happy squeels of children
The operning of presents
My joyful spouse
Sitting together hand in hand
We watch our Children
Such a happy dream!

But wait. Its starting to fade.

I wake with a start and jump from bed
Searching through the house I feel dead
No lights no children no smiling spouse
Im all alone in an emty house
I go back up to bed tears leaking from my eyes
All my life I was discuised.

Loves lost
A great cost
All alone
Sorrow sown
My life as cold and barren
As the snow landscape outside my window.

End.

Comments

[Mage_In_Training]

Thank you! This was just a little poem that came from the top of my head, as all of them do. ^-^

[Mistress of the Samurai]

Not bad! If I may, I'd like to offer my services as a beta. You make some minor mistakes, but you're a load better than some of the people on this site.