My lonely soul

• Artist: eagles-ravens
• Description: It's not the best thing i've written and it probably isn't very good, but i felt like i needed to write it, I don't mind what you say. I like peoples criticim
• Date: 09/24/2011
• Tags: lonely soul

I wake up
I fall asleep
I stand up
I loved you
You hated me
What else should I do
But offer you my soul
I thought you were my all
Now you are like that hall
It stands there in that light
Like an empty pit
I'll never get.

Comments

[Reaper2601]

u didnt use the right 'tense' and u havent said any thing it is jsut a couple of words put together to make a sentence.