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My Insane Ramblings.
i quit my other...i'm going back to bad poetry...
not story but poem?
ok, i'm kinda tired of writing stories today...=P it's been like forever since i'v writin poetry... i used to be really good at it...i used to think i sucked at it but now i go back and re-read them...*sigh* i hope i can still write like that...
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Pain,
why is that all i feel?
Is it because i lied?
That single time?
they told me...
and i believed them.
You really didn't leave me,
but they said so.

They said you hated me,
and i played along like a pupet.
and so i stand here,
staring down from this canyon wall.
willing to jump,
but your still back there...
on the dusty trail,
wondering what happened.
but i can't tell you...
can I?
~Sakuka


ok....this is a version of what happened between me and my boyfriend...Potatoe52....except i never stood on top of a building trying to comit suicide... xp






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Winry_Rockbell799
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commentCommented on: Mon Jul 07, 2008 @ 02:17am
Nice poem. I like the image in the last stanza of how she is standing on the wall and he is away from her. and the last line is a nice finish, too!


commentCommented on: Sat Jul 12, 2008 @ 03:24am
I should hope that you would never do that! scream .....that would be very sad indeed! *sniff*



Nejiha
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potato52
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commentCommented on: Fri Aug 15, 2008 @ 10:30am
you can tell me anything anytime.


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