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living dead girl (its a part of a chapter from my new book)
the girl stared at the boy, eyes overflowing with tears. the wind blew with a sudden fericeness blowing her hair into her face.
"do you really love her..?" the girl whispered in a shakey voice. hugging herself and rubbing her arms as if a sudden chill suddenly had passed through her entire being. the boy nodded solemly. the wind died.
"i love her more than anyone in the entire world." he said. the girl nodded and her knees began to shake. it seemed as if at any momment she would either vomit or pass out, perhaps both.
"very well then." the girl choked out trying not to scream from pure frustration and hatred. she turned around and began walking away. the boy makes a small motion in the attempt to make her stay but gives up. the sooner she was out of his sight the sooner he could get back to the other girl. with a sudden gust of wind he turned his back on the girl that was walking away. this was unwise. he had know the girl for several years he knew how much she loved him, he even knew alot about her that no one else knew. but there was one thing he knew but perpetually ignored, she wasn't one to go down in silence. a scream broke the night air, cutting through even the wind. the boy turned around in time to see the girl fast upon him. he had no time to run.
"if you love her so much than you can join her in hell!" the girl yelled above the wind again. before he had time to even whimper a bullet was deep into his heart. the girl laughed and sobbed in short bitter gasps.
"see you soon dearest." she spat as she raised the muzzle to her head and pulled the trigger.
- last chapter from "living dead girl"
(yes its a book im writing)






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Zanep Lodes
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commentCommented on: Sun Aug 31, 2008 @ 10:35pm
I like it. I would see if you can't find some way to use 'he, she' less... it's probably a bit hard to, but it will help the flow of the story.


commentCommented on: Sun Aug 31, 2008 @ 11:21pm
o.o... Nice, but scary xD



Zaneras
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