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	Ichi's Horcrux If you understand why that's my journal's name, I will award you 30 house points. xD Anyway, I'll angst in here and put any poems that aren't too awful. &3

	bzt (a poem)
	bzt (a poem)


Bzt. this is the sound of her heart Bzt. this metal piece inside her chest Bzt. does almost everything a Bzt. human heart can do Bzt. it pumps her blood Bzt. through her body Bzt. to her lungs Bzt. and brain Bzt. her feet Bzt. fingertips Bzt. and of course, back to itself Bzt. but this metal thumping object Bzt. that resides behind her ribs Bzt. is not a heart Bzt. it cannot love Bzt. nor hate Bzt. nor feel anything at all Bzt. and one may wonder Bzt. how does this girl feel about... Bzt. ha Bzt. you shouldn’t wonder about Bzt. what cannot be Bzt. you may wonder, instead Bzt. why this cold-hearted girl Bzt. has a cold heart Bzt. september, it started Bzt. she told the doctors Bzt. “my heart, it has a small break Bzt. please, fix it” Bzt. the doctors fixed her Bzt. and it left only Bzt. a tiny scar Bzt. october came Bzt. and with it Bzt. another tear in her heart Bzt. “please, can you fix it” Bzt. they did Bzt. though this one left Bzt. a deeper, longer scar Bzt. november, december, january Bzt. passed without another break Bzt. and the long, deep scar Bzt. faded slowly until it was Bzt. a tiny scar once again Bzt. february Bzt. march Bzt. the longest and deepest Bzt. scar was left Bzt. though the doctors tried Bzt. tried Bzt. tried Bzt. to fix it Bzt. this scar did not Bzt. fade Bzt. it was far too deep Bzt. may arrived Bzt. and with it Bzt. a break and a knife Bzt. the break shattered Bzt. her human heart Bzt. completely Bzt. and the knife left twisted Bzt. broken Bzt. painful bits of metal Bzt. in the ruined heart Bzt. still the doctors Bzt. tried to fix her Bzt. but they could not Bzt. fix it this time Bzt. finally she said Bzt. “no more, please, no more Bzt. fix it, fix me” Bzt. and the doctors showed her Bzt. her scarred, mangled Bzt. bloody heart Bzt. beside it Bzt. a bionic, perfect Bzt. ‘heart’ Bzt. “we can’t fix Bzt. that heart anymore” Bzt. her hand closed around Bzt. the cold, silver ‘heart’ Bzt. she held it to her chest Bzt. and smiled Bzt. her final smile Bzt. her real heart Bzt. was tossed away Bzt. at her command Bzt. Bzt Bz B . wrote this when i was upset. it sucks. but whateves. [.Ichigo-Chan.] · Fri Sep 19, 2008 @ 04:02pm · 4 Comments


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	It doesn't suck Ichigo. I love it. It's sad, but beautiful. Offline Madlibzz · Community Member · Fri Sep 19, 2008 @ 05:54pm


	No sucky!! this is a really good poem i like the bzt's between every line it helps with the over all theme. speaking of wich i loved the theme. great sensory language and a good concept overall good job. Offline everlasting elegy · Community Member · Fri Sep 19, 2008 @ 10:49pm


	Such an interesting piece, I've never seen anything like it. I loved it though. You have great style, just like Dumbledore. How is your book coming? Offline MysteriousSoulreaper · Community Member · Sat Sep 20, 2008 @ 12:20am


	To be honest- at first, the 'bzts' annoyed me a little. xD; But as I read, I found them to be more likable. They work well- especially how they dwindle at the end. Another thing I like about the poem is its 'retrospect' tenses. I think it's perty gewd. O= Offline tsukiraven · Community Member · Mon Sep 22, 2008 @ 11:40pm

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